This is my first development draft for my front cover. I asked four of my fellow pupils to comment on the page with pros and cons, plus some constructive criticism that I can take into account and edit.
1st Draft
Harry:The key image is very effective, Melissa is making eye contact which makes it personal with reader. Adding to this there is clear iconography that she is in a rock band with the use of an electric guitar and mise-en-scene with the long fringe and dark clothing. However if I was to edit anything on your front cover it would be the photo reel, for the second image down, there needs to be some form of background within this image in order for it to match with the above image. Another thing that is needed, is an issue number and date, this particular furniture is vital as it's a common code and convention for magazines.
Shannon: Having a footer helps to add more stories to the front cover yet more effectivley and smaller, the use of rock hands to seperate each band name is effective as it matches the genre. Within the polaroid there needs to be coverlines to explain what each image is about therefore the reader would know whether that page is to their preferred reading.
Kieran: I personally think that the font 'hulkbusters' used for the masthead fits in perfectley with your theme of metal/rock as its bold and overpowering just like the music. I also like the colour scheme of red and black, two colours that also reflect the genre. However one piece of criticism is that the image of ryan screaming has been used twice in your work, meaning that there is not enough variety within your images. A vital piece of furniture that needs to be included is a bar code and price, these will help fill up dead space and will make the magazine look professional.
Rachel: The use of real footage is effective as it will engage the reader, adding to this it shows action which will attract an audience as it will remind them of previous concerts they've been too. If I was to change any thing it would be the heading, it needs to be much larger. Another thing I would include is fun, something that lures an audience in either posters or a competition.
2nd Draft
Harry: Having a poster section is very effective as it is attractive and fun, it is good that you have made the words 'free' and '2' in bold as they are what would lure an audience in. Some constructive criticism within this front page is that the title layer over the key images head, layering is effective but the key image is the main highlight of the page. I would also reduce the size of the bar code as it looks unprofessional.
Shannon: It is effective how you have added a background colour to the front cover, it makes the page more attractive and the black is effective as it matches the genre and makes the other colours stand out.Two things I would change are your placing of text on the footer, make sure it is within the borders so text doesnt get cut off, and finally the star looks too big for the text, it could look effective if the text is on three roads so 'FREE' can stand out more.
Kieran:It is effective how the font has been changed to 'chiller' it adds variety to the type faces yet doesnt make the page look too messy with too many different fonts. To make the text stand out it could have an effect added to it, be it a glow, shadow etc. There needs to be a coverline for the key image, this needs to be much larger than all the cover lines, it should include her name and either a quote or sentence, this would stand out to a reader.
Rachel:The use of changing the photo reel to red is effective as it helps to match the colour scheme and it wont blend into the background. Adding another colour onto the page adds variety and brightness to it, especially with yellow. Certain things that need addressing is the placing of the masthead, make sure it is kept within the margins, another thing is the coverlines on the photo reel images, the yellow blends in with the image.
3rd Draft
This is my third development draft for my front cover.
Harry: The use of white for the coverlines is effective as it stands out against the images also the use of having the name of the band bolder than the colour lines helps to differentiate them. Things that need editing are the main coverline, the quality of the text is blurred and therefore needs changing and needs to be made much larger. Also the squares in the photo reel need to be changed to black so it looks realistic.
Shannon:Adding a shadow to the footer has made the text stand out even more which is effective. Another good point about this front cover is the glow around the artists name as it shows fame and success. If I were to change to things it would be the size of the price as it tends to be very miniscual, I would also make sure that the guitar on the key image doesnt cover the face on the poster as the face is the most important part on the image itself.
Kieran: I think the outline around the key image is very clever as it matches the colour scheme and helps the image to stand out as most of it is black. It is effective how the fill colour in the star and the main coverline match the footer fill colour as it creates consistency. Things that need addressing are the placing of the posters as where it currently is, is vital space for more coverlines. Secondly as previously said more coverlines are needed to lure an audience in!
Rachel: One good thing about this draft is the mise-en-scene within the images, they are wearing dark clothes, avril lavigne is wearing eyeliner and ryan/melissa have long fringes, common iconography for a metal/rock genre. Things I would add are a header or something at the top that can add more information to it. Another thing that needs addressing is the posters, one image is very dark and blends into the back ground.
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